Mmm jumping around in the timeline eh? That works good for serials, so long as the reader remembers the main plot lol I like this little look at Tack and Renkle. I like this so far and it’s very easily consumable/bite-sized, which is huge for most people.
Edit notes:
Before he could turn and shoot his(extra word maybe?) Tack a dark glance, Renkle saw Lindsey's smile relight.
Seems like no matter how many times I read my own stuff, my eyes are numb to some of those little errors, so thanks for pointing them out—they will be corrected!
And we'll see how the back-and-forth story format works. I always like those non-linear stories to help provide alternative perspectives on events.
Mmm jumping around in the timeline eh? That works good for serials, so long as the reader remembers the main plot lol I like this little look at Tack and Renkle. I like this so far and it’s very easily consumable/bite-sized, which is huge for most people.
Edit notes:
Before he could turn and shoot his(extra word maybe?) Tack a dark glance, Renkle saw Lindsey's smile relight.
Tack slide (slid) his hand from Renkle's
Seems like no matter how many times I read my own stuff, my eyes are numb to some of those little errors, so thanks for pointing them out—they will be corrected!
And we'll see how the back-and-forth story format works. I always like those non-linear stories to help provide alternative perspectives on events.
I think it’ll work good.